My speakers don't like all the bass on this one (computer speakers will lose some of it). The piece is a little noisy and strange--still thinking about it.
Update: Posted the first remix I did of this tune and took down Version 2; changed the title of this post to reflect the substitution. The first version has more going on--an additional rhythm track. Still thinking about this. Usually this is the point where I add a melody that either overwhelms, pulls the tune together, or both. Am trying to break the pattern.